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[Salvos] 83. Observations (Removed for KU)

(Removed for KU)

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It's kind of unclear who's saying what in the dialogue sequence starting with β€œAnything stands out to you?”

EchoingRuby

"Every Gatho Mammoth, Ground Craver, and Rancor{s}" - Rancor should be singular like the others for consistency. Also in the last bit, "the Brilsum{'s} Ruins", I'd recommend to either go with "the Brilsum Ruins" or "Brilsum's ruins".

J

Should take out the sleeping monsters while the mind reapers are bringing back targets

CryoHydra357

First mwahaha.

Darren Li


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