[Salvos] 62. Bounty Hunters + Poll: Should I Changed the Last Chapter? (Removed for KU)
Added 2021-02-02 21:16:23 +0000 UTC(Removed for KU)
Comments
I didn't really see any serious issues with the last chapter. My only advice would be that if you don't have an in story reason for "The Devil" to be the same one from the Earthly Abrahamic religions, you will probably get less blow back about it if you use a more obscure demonic entity from a less recent religion. "The Devil" comes with a LOT of preexisting religious symbolism and connotations connected to it. My guess is since Earth is a part of this shared multiverse, then you have a serious plot based reason for bringing a demon from our myths into this setting and the religious connotations are actually important to the story. If that's the case then roll with it, but be careful since religion is one of those things people can be very touchy about.
Melting Sky
2021-02-13 09:49:10 +0000 UTC"And{ }pounced on him from behind" - Add "I" in there "so much {of} a scream" - "as"
J
2021-02-13 00:51:19 +0000 UTCThat was an awesome fight.
Thundermike00
2021-02-10 22:59:19 +0000 UTC"The Devil had been right" That's a rare sentence :)
Njordt
2021-02-04 04:16:32 +0000 UTCCould you possibly point out which part felt the most awkward to you so I can edit it to flow better?
MelasD
2021-02-02 21:29:25 +0000 UTCI voted no but if anything make some minor edits to make it flow a little bit better. But no need to rewrite the entire thing in my opinion.
Zhaliora
2021-02-02 21:27:09 +0000 UTC
