Chapter 5, Page 22...
Added 2021-01-16 23:03:23 +0000 UTC......While I'm very exciting with where things are going in the story, I noticed I have created what will be a slightly awkward transition. I'd seen this coming before and thought I had it handled, but I think it will need a bit more work. I'll press on with the story for now. Hopefully I can fix the issue later with an extra page or panel. Or maybe I'm overthinking it? We shall see. ^^;
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Comments
Val's blushing, there's a "sweatle" on her face, and she made a "gulp" sound. She sooo wants to be part of this game! :P
Shrub Jump
2021-01-19 01:25:07 +0000 UTC599 now (and it's a 5$ one, too!). Think fast! :-P
PulpFiction
2021-01-18 18:47:51 +0000 UTCThanks! We’ll see what you think of the next page.
Stereoscope Comics
2021-01-18 18:34:36 +0000 UTCThat’s right Val! Let the curiosity flow through you!
Stereoscope Comics
2021-01-18 18:31:17 +0000 UTC👍
Stereoscope Comics
2021-01-18 18:30:11 +0000 UTCThe transition on the next page will be a time/location jump. Not a huge one, but I’m hoping it works or can be easily fixed. I may be overthinking it, but we see when the next page goes up.
Stereoscope Comics
2021-01-18 18:29:45 +0000 UTCWait, WHAT?! I haven’t checked my DevArt numbers for a while! I gotta go check that out! Something special for 600 patrons is a great idea! I’m gonna have to give it some thought. Hmmm...
Stereoscope Comics
2021-01-18 18:27:36 +0000 UTC“You got a license for that look?”
Stereoscope Comics
2021-01-18 18:24:09 +0000 UTCI wonder what next pages are going to be about. Anyway, I await with anticipation. :)
Fenix
2021-01-18 16:28:45 +0000 UTCSoon! Just a few pages to go!
Stereoscope Comics
2021-01-18 14:19:55 +0000 UTCGame over. So we have bondage now?
Fenix
2021-01-18 13:37:50 +0000 UTCMeg is pondering what she should do in panel 2... All three are blushing? There may be something in the blush... (Sorry for that bad try at a joke. :D )
the_iceman
2021-01-17 12:20:19 +0000 UTCYes, that was my thought too.
the_iceman
2021-01-17 12:17:47 +0000 UTCWho can resist Bambi eyes? I'm assuming the transition you mean is that Val suddenly seems to know what the bet was between them? Not a big problem, you can't have have all the explanatory conversations set out. If you do feel the need to tighten it up, maybe just change Val's text to something like "Did Ellie just ask Meg's permission?"
PsyGremlin
2021-01-17 08:46:30 +0000 UTCI love how it's getting to Val that she sort of knows what's going on between them but not the specifics. Her imagination must be running wild about now while she desperately tries to suppress it
Michael
2021-01-17 08:14:06 +0000 UTCI'm open to chat-rebounding ideas back and fourth if it would help sort the progression. Some outside perspective can help any artist in a rut.
Jordan Andrew Scherr
2021-01-17 04:25:47 +0000 UTCVal's reaction is great.
Fritz Sands
2021-01-17 04:06:15 +0000 UTCI just noticed you're at 598 patrons. Any plans for when you break 600? And you are at 510k page views on DA. I think breaking half a million page views deserves a celebration as well! Shall we get the Champagne out?
PulpFiction
2021-01-17 02:03:16 +0000 UTCThey are all so cute!
Silence
2021-01-17 01:48:04 +0000 UTCI am sure this will be more win-win than draw.
Fritz Sands
2021-01-17 00:17:32 +0000 UTCOut of luck Ellie. We’ve seen how Meg tricked Sam. You’re gonna be “suffering” a lose.
DuskStealth
2021-01-17 00:10:35 +0000 UTCThe puppy dog eyes are dangerous
kou32
2021-01-16 23:26:42 +0000 UTCLove how quick Meg got into mistress mode soon as she learnt she was being legit. Total pro here.
Death of Ink
2021-01-16 23:06:31 +0000 UTCSorry little one. Meg wins this game.
2021-01-16 23:05:55 +0000 UTCCan't wait to see this bathroom break playout.
Brad Kitts
2021-01-16 23:05:43 +0000 UTC
