Page 44 & 45 updated!
Added 2024-08-27 01:42:47 +0000 UTCI'm pretty sure I've said it before, but the input I get from all of you is like a cheat code. A few of you pointed out that I'd forgotten the leash in multiple panels and that the chair didn't look particularly safe. I've made the fixes and I'm very pleased with the results. I also have two different versions of page 45 with the updated panel 1. I added some action lines as well as a fish-eyed lens filter to one of them. I'm not sure how I feel about it. I think I like it, but I'm not sure. Let me know your thoughts.
Thanks for help help!
Comments
The "fisheye" effect works for me. Don't hesitate to distort reality a bit, if it helps convey an emotional reaction!
Shrub Jump
2024-08-29 20:52:18 +0000 UTCoh yeah, there's definitely a few lines not to be crossed. I can go to guys for thoughts and comments about what works better in a panel or page composition, whether a payoff packs a punch or not, and I can usually count on you guys to point out bad spelling, grammar, and inconsistantcies (like a leash that's suddenly disappears). ^^; What I can't go to you for is storylines, punchlines, dialogue, character development, etc. (although I may get inspired by comments and questions).
Stereoscope Comics
2024-08-29 15:32:42 +0000 UTCFish eye works Really well also give instant vine boom realisation on her face
WritersBlock
2024-08-28 09:25:08 +0000 UTCCriticizing something you care about is awkward, and doing it in a public forum is even more so. There aren't many upsides, and you risk being branded a public enemy. It's also difficult to steer clear of that elusive red line beyond with "helpful" turns into "obnoxious". Then again, this is a community that prides itself on honesty and trust, so, as the saying goes - "if you see something - say something". ;) Thanks for the kind words. I really like the improved design. With regard to the fisheye effect - I'm gonna abstain. Both versions have their merits.
Amber7
2024-08-27 08:53:08 +0000 UTCI prefer the non-fisheye version personally - I like how it makes Ellie seem small while showing more of the hardware
Cass
2024-08-27 07:59:20 +0000 UTCI like the fish-eye! It's adds the right, 'gulp' vibe to that panel, imho
FoggyKernel
2024-08-27 06:25:49 +0000 UTCI like how the chair is comparatively more secure. Bolster down to the floor like that, it looks safer overall.
Jordan Andrew Scherr
2024-08-27 06:19:01 +0000 UTCI kinda like the fish-eye view, it demonstrates the shock on Ellie's face really well. I'm glad that our comments and feedback help you out, kinda makes the comic feel more personal. Keep up the fantastic work, and don't forget get to get some rest in as well.
Nick
2024-08-27 03:38:38 +0000 UTCI don't like the fish-eye it kinda detracts from the fun reveal of what kind of chair she sat in without realizing.
DoctorHam
2024-08-27 02:45:27 +0000 UTCI'm very glad that our feedback is helping, and it's nice to see it going into effect.
Katt Wallingford
2024-08-27 02:31:17 +0000 UTCFisheye effect is cool, gives an interesting camera angle to the panel. Only downside is that you don’t see the rest of the chair.
IAmMalenia
2024-08-27 02:25:58 +0000 UTCThe leash is a good add. I personally don't care for the fish eye effect. It kinda takes me out of the scene.
Tony Campbell
2024-08-27 01:55:16 +0000 UTCI kinda like it without the zoom in effect, we can see the chair better that way.
Death of Ink
2024-08-27 01:54:21 +0000 UTC45 Looks soo much better. It's amazing how much scope and detail a zoom out can add.
Brad Kitts
2024-08-27 01:51:02 +0000 UTCI like the fisheye effect.
Cheshire Noir
2024-08-27 01:49:16 +0000 UTCPersonally, I like the version that shows more of the chair. It gives more details and because she's smaller in the frame, it communicates how vulnerable and scared she is.
PiLambdaOd
2024-08-27 01:47:29 +0000 UTC
