Editing Marathon: Chapter Twelve.
Added 2024-07-30 11:45:58 +0000 UTCHi guys.
Here is Chapter Twelve.
Thanks for all the help. It means a lot to me.
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Comments
#29, can remove in this town, seems redundant : Having been in this town for the past six years, Alena would have known if there was anything magical going on (in this town) also a comma typo (that kind of being.,) change comma and no to or: There, however, hadn’t been any signs(, no) (or) build-up of events that could have led to something like this.
λɟᴉɹɒןnɓuᴉs
2024-08-06 15:57:05 +0000 UTC#28, maybe change the comma after person to a period. reads better with the 2 commas added: The boy before her was just such a person(,). With no ounce of magic within him, there’s simply no way he could summon (,) let alone interact (,) with such an entity.
λɟᴉɹɒןnɓuᴉs
2024-08-06 15:48:10 +0000 UTC
