Crazy Alternate Future Part 01-01
Added 2015-06-12 02:36:01 +0000 UTC"Sometime I hate how generosity I am. I can't refuse people who ask for help..." - Aerial Ace
Warning : This comic is alternate sequel of Crazy Future where Crazy Future is clopcomic. Normal Crazy Future can be found here => http://vavacung.deviantart.com/gallery/51002140/Crazy-Future
Character Data : http://vavacung.deviantart.com/gallery/51508160/Crazy-Future-Character-Card
Beware broken English. This comic have no proofreader since my current proofreader not comfortable to work for NSWF stuff. But if you be kind and help me fix it by comment to this post. I will be glad and fix it.
I will update this comic 2-3 page per week. Since I want to balance my time for university and another comic too. Hope you understand...
Comments
Yeah, but the link I have put everything in one convenient location.
Raile21
2015-06-13 06:51:52 +0000 UTCYes, that would work. Its more like a personal preference really. I'd say it would be safer without it, but there might be more fans with it. Up to you really, why not draft both version and see which one you like best.
Raile21
2015-06-13 06:51:26 +0000 UTCAnd that comic. I know it. I watched it on DA. <a href="http://shepherd0821.deviantart.com/art/Episode-0-First-Day-in-Ponyville-page1-355346237" rel="nofollow noopener" target="_blank">http://shepherd0821.deviantart.com/art/Episode-0-First-Day-in-Ponyville-page1-355346237</a>
Vavacung
2015-06-13 06:45:26 +0000 UTCCensor tag may add for free watcher when it finish and public outside Patreons. And I'm not fan with crotch boobs at the moment...
Vavacung
2015-06-13 06:42:23 +0000 UTCI know. I already expected it. And thank you for help.
Vavacung
2015-06-13 06:41:22 +0000 UTCOh not bad, your reference have "crotch boobs" on them so that's a plus. In my opinion my reference have a better facial expression though, so if you can combine their strong points I think that would be an amazing doujin. Here's another reference for you but it can't really be considered explicit. <a href="http://m.hentai2read.com/mlp_4koma/" rel="nofollow noopener" target="_blank">http://m.hentai2read.com/mlp_4koma/</a> Would you add a censor tag on your work?
Raile21
2015-06-13 06:37:42 +0000 UTCActually. I use this as reference. <a href="http://g.e-hentai.org/g/689867/b9d6812215/" rel="nofollow noopener" target="_blank">http://g.e-hentai.org/g/689867/b9d6812215/</a>
Vavacung
2015-06-13 04:53:34 +0000 UTCFor your reference, an example of what you are trying to make: <a href="http://m.hentai2read.com/rainbow_green_apple/1/" rel="nofollow noopener" target="_blank">http://m.hentai2read.com/rainbow_green_apple/1/</a>
Raile21
2015-06-12 12:21:59 +0000 UTCI think you better get used to getting very few feedback in Patreon, since there's like 22 of us and thousands in Deviant to give feedback. But I will try to give feedback whenever possible in Patreon since I already do that in Deviantart. I have confidence in my english, I will help you if Dracoblair is squeamish with NSFW. Grammar-wise your dialog is correct. However there are better dialog to suit each character personality and speech. Here is my suggestion for this chapter. Ace: "Hey egghead! Owly said you needed my help?" Dawn: "Ah good you're here Ace, I wish to test this potion. Please drink what's in this vial"
Raile21
2015-06-12 12:14:24 +0000 UTC
