happy tears [poem]
Added 2024-09-14 06:09:05 +0000 UTC[You see]
I am my own universe
I am this complex & incredible system that can function independently of you
[I know this because I have before]
and - like so many complex systems before me - no one quite knows how I run
[Not even I]
So, pardon me if I am mystified by your magic
when [late at night] you lay your hand on my heart,
tell me [you're mine],
and just like clockwork
[but a very well-made clock that runs on a very complex system]
I smile and cry
Yes
I am my own world with its own environment
[But you, my absolute dearest]
You can change the weather
Comments
Thank you, Mare 💜
Beatriz
2024-09-14 22:17:52 +0000 UTCOh Bea that is beautiful💜
Mare
2024-09-14 19:04:43 +0000 UTCI fell asleep to this last night and I’m just… grateful.
QQMegs
2024-09-14 17:15:41 +0000 UTCThere’s a change in the weather pattern happening in my eye area currently…😭😭
Kim
2024-09-14 16:19:50 +0000 UTC💜💜💜
Ray Purchase
2024-09-14 15:19:44 +0000 UTCMorning girl parts her eyelashes another day of receiving: information, instruction, signal in cones and rods [she sees] light But she isn’t ready She closes off that world again and seeks heart [she sees] dream [she feels] hands and lips [she loves] [she misses] her own absolute dearest You know how when we’re little, one of the ways we learn about ourselves is through simile and comparison? “Your hair is red like an autumn leaf; your eyes are blue-gray like rain on slate; your skin is soft like a pillow: brave as a lion, bright as the sun, clever as a fox, wise as an owl, gentle as a lamb.” Something I think your poem pictures beautifully is how love can expand our language for ourselves. When what you know of your universe/system/world/environment/weather is both confirmed and changed by the ever long wonder of a hand on a heart at night, or a kiss in the early morning—everything. It’s a little terrifying and a lot magical, when it’s good, like the best learning. Another simile. Gorgeous poem, doctor. Thank you 💜
caroscope
2024-09-14 15:15:39 +0000 UTCDude. Damn. Wonderful
Ray Purchase
2024-09-14 15:09:01 +0000 UTCThis version of Doc... all sappy, heartfelt, lovey-dovey. I like it. Tried something too: In my realm of stars and endless night, A universe woven with shadows and light, I dance in the echoes of my own divine, An intricate maze of space and time. I am a system of patterns and flaws, A wandering comet on a solitary course, Yet when you touch my heart with gentle grace, You transform my cosmos into a sacred space. Your words, constellations in my sky, Rearrange the stars as they softly fly, And though I chart my own celestial course, You alter orbits with a subtle force. So here I stand, a world both vast and grand, Moved by the warmth of your reverent hand. I am my own realm, with weather untamed, But you, my dearest, have my skies rearranged.
Beatriz
2024-09-14 15:06:39 +0000 UTCBeautiful
Hannah 11
2024-09-14 14:59:32 +0000 UTCLovely.
MJ
2024-09-14 14:51:10 +0000 UTCGoddammit! 💜🥺
Carrie A (Earserosera)
2024-09-14 14:42:56 +0000 UTC😭♥️
Kesa
2024-09-14 11:30:33 +0000 UTCThat's the magic of love ❤️
EdenRose
2024-09-14 10:40:22 +0000 UTC
