[Edited] Ch. 48-49
Chapter 48 - Building Lynnria
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[Edited] Ch. 46 & 47
Chapter 46 - Art Appreciation
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Episode 12 - Dark Waters
Oscar? Come in, Oscar.
< static >
We’re sure this thing is working?
…?
Maybe? Don’t tell me, maybe! Does nothing on this blasted station— Ugh… Pick up the...
2023-12-29 17:04:45 +0000 UTC View Post[Edited] Chapters 44 & 45
There are times when I quite enjoy rereading my
2023-12-27 23:02:52 +0000 UTC View Post[Edited] Chapter 43 - Forbidden Mechanisms
I had to rework this one pretty extensively. The main thrust is there, but I really needed some more explanation for why Jax and Arx took to Lynnria so quickly. Hopefully it reads well.
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“Not that I’m complaining, Lynnria,” I murmured sleepily, “but I only get my L...
2023-12-26 23:46:26 +0000 UTC View Post[Edited] Chapters 41-42
So, I had planned to get this portion dropped y
2023-12-20 21:27:02 +0000 UTC View PostEpisode 11 - Dive Prep and... You Know
In loving memory of
Samantha Aete Mange
May you live in our hearts forever.
Hmm… I think that should be fine enough. It’s short, sweet, and to the point. Anything more would be… extrava...
2023-12-15 17:33:23 +0000 UTC View Post[Edited] Chapter 38 - Witches Reel With a Wooden Man
Before the dust had even settled, I began rattling off the Words to Unclothe the Darkness. Arx had been performing admirably to facilitate our escape despite the lack of light through a combination of natural gifts and experience, but she would have next to no chance in a melee. Lynnria and I, no...
2023-12-13 22:28:27 +0000 UTC View Post[Edited] Chapter 37 - The Brink
Added a bit of extra foreshadowing for the cutoff scene that happens later in the chapter. Kind of came out of nowhere previously.
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As Arx bolted for the door, I immediately thought to warn her of the floor hazard, however I was still too out of it to do much of anyth...
2023-12-12 23:35:16 +0000 UTC View Post[Edited] Chapter 36 - Desperate Magic
I stood as though transfixed, my gaze locked with her own.
It was almost funny—in a morbid sort of way. While her eyes had been closed, Arx might well have been no different from the crystalline stone she was imprisoned within. A beautiful work of art perhaps, but no less cold and lifeles...
2023-12-11 22:34:51 +0000 UTC View Post[Edited] Chapter 35 - The Light at the End of the Rope
Lots of clarification in this chapter, particularly at the end with the puzzle reveal.
Meanwhile, in my life, had the final run of 'The Christmas Story' this weekend up at the community theater. But it got cut short on Saturday right during intermission. Believe it or not, the theater caugh...
2023-12-11 21:39:31 +0000 UTC View PostChapter 34 - The Smallest of Blessings
Man. My editor got really up in arms about how vague the dream sequence got in this chapter. I know he doesn't like the reader having the possibility of being confused, but I'm standing my ground on this one. You're supposed to be confused! It's only supposed to make sense after the fact...
2023-12-07 22:22:20 +0000 UTC View Post[Edited] Chapter 33 - On the Nature of Faen
Read along and check editor's notes with the attachment.
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Our expressions of joy at having finally discovered the treasure rapidly dissolved into ones of confusion and disappointment. Beneath the lovely fabric of the throw was hidden a worn and rotting trunk. Its hinges ...
2023-12-06 22:38:45 +0000 UTC View PostEpisode 10 - Stuck in a Well
< Ping! >
Metallic sphere jerks violently then falls to the ground with a large, smoking hole pierced through it.
< Extended silence >
Small herd of confused Tyranno-taurs s...
2023-12-06 02:52:31 +0000 UTC View Post[Edited] Chapter 32 - Upside Down and Inside Out
For several minutes, I just laid there. The adrenaline spike I had suffered combined with far too little sleep, far too little food, and far… far too much unexplained bullshit had triggered a state of thoughtless limbo.
Sometimes, the world just gets to be too much and my brain w...
2023-12-06 01:05:20 +0000 UTC View Post[Edited] Chapter 31 - Dervish
Look for ch 32 here in an hour or two. It's done, but I need to do a quick review. And If I make it, ch 10 of The Human Experiment should drop today. Getting pretty tired though.
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Lynnria peered around the corner cautiously.
All around us, there was nothing but black ...
2023-12-06 00:12:41 +0000 UTC View Post[Edited] Chapter 30 - Signs
Almost 700 new words to this chapter.
And this marks the halfway point to the developmental edit phase. Whoo!
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Three by three by three.
In yellow. In blue. In green.
Six for one. Seven for two. Eight for me.
In light. In dark. In between.
Thr...
[Edited] Chapter 29 - A Realization
I returned to consciousness slowly, the fragments of some strange dream spinning off to the corners of my mind. I still rather vividly remembered something about a bunch of hovering pink pyramids in the sky. Then things had taken a bizarre turn, and I seemed to recall getting hot and heavy with A...
2023-11-30 21:24:02 +0000 UTC View Post[Edited] Chapter 28 - Imaginary Foes
So, today I am both heavily medicated and sleep deprived from catching some respiratory infection from all the kids I've been doing this play with. Also, opening night is this week, so we've been rehearsing like fiends. Which is to say, I may have missed one or two things this time.
Added a...
2023-11-29 22:35:50 +0000 UTC View Post[Edited] Chapter 27 - Hints of Magic
“You’re sure?”
Lynnria dipped her head to one side. “What choice do I have?”
I stared at her incredulously for a moment before pointing to the ground. “You… you could stay here.”
That was what a sane person would have done. But I never seemed to meet any...
2023-11-28 22:53:30 +0000 UTC View Post[Edited] Chapters 25-26
These are the chapters in which we finally star
2023-11-27 21:38:49 +0000 UTC View Post[Edited] Chapters 23 & 24
Been a tad busy with Thanksgiving and all. Got the chapter from yesterday done, but didn't have time to post after. So... Thanksgiving double feature?
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<23 - I Dream of Stats>
I have always considered myself a fairly decent swimmer. I was no fish ...
2023-11-23 18:06:15 +0000 UTC View Post[Edited] Chapter 22 - Twisted Funhouse of Death
Rereading this one was a lot more fun that I thought it would be. Don't know if that's the consensus, but I actually enjoyed the thought process behind figuring out the traps and puzzles.
Mostly changes in word choice here. Making the jokes hit a little harder, etc.
original in the at...
2023-11-21 22:06:39 +0000 UTC View Post[Edited] Chapter 21 - A Bug, an Eagle, and an Invitation
For a long while, I sat there watching as the sun slowly crawled its way over the horizon. The Stele stood at my back. The winds were bitter and cold, and I could see some dark clouds gathering off to my left. It would probably rain today. Or snow. It was cold enough for that, I felt sure.
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2023-11-20 23:07:10 +0000 UTC View Post[Edited] Chapter 20 - Bline the Many
Hey, this one wasn't so bad! Go past me!
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Bline—or whoever she was—looked at me in shock for a half-second before snorting into her teacup. Tea shot up and over the edge, splattering everywhere. Including her fancy, white ball gown.
I had to wince. That dress lo...
2023-11-17 23:42:25 +0000 UTC View PostEpisode 9 - If at first you don't succeed...
Yes... the picture is cursed. But I couldn't resist sharing Trannnnnnnasus Rex with you. lol
I think I may have broken the poor AI's brain with 'Tyrannosaurus Rex centaur.'
Also, so sorry this c...
2023-11-17 17:35:24 +0000 UTC View Post[Edited] Chapter 19 - The Stele of the Fourth Creation
This one was kind of weird to read. There were several spots where I had to roll my eyes over how wordy I can get sometimes, but there were others where I had to nod, impressed with myself.
Anyway, I spent a good while cutting down a lot of the chaff. Hopefully it reads better than be...
2023-11-16 20:41:40 +0000 UTC View Post[Edited] Chapter 18 - And So She Came
Woo! An easy one finally! Just a few touch ups to this one. Though, I did have to change the one or two minor points.
See attachment for editorial notes.
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I stood stock still for a handful of breaths while terror raced its way up and down my spine. 2023-11-15 17:01:55 +0000 UTC View Post
[Edited] Chapter 17 - PeeWee Blood Sport
Luckily, we ended up passing a weapon shop as we approached the arena, so we stopped in to pick up a couple of ready-made items. Arx bought a pair of scimitars, and I went ahead and got myself a decent round shield. It was not quite so big as the last one, and consequently, it was far less heavy....
2023-11-14 21:50:58 +0000 UTC View Post